I would really like it if this character was reviewed I have been working on the Character for along and I mean LONG time.
She used to look like this
now she looks like this
Other photos can be found here:
http://www.tumblr.com/blog/megumiitachi( Not that many at the moment)
Name: Megumi Ai
Age: 13-22
Bithday: August 3
Bloodtype : A
Former Village: Konohagakure/ Konoha
Eye Color: Green
Hair Color and Style : Black when the sun hits her hair there is a tint of blue in it. Is styled in a pony tail when on missions, training, and working at the Keikoku hotsprings
Hairstyle : Always pulled into a ponytail when training or on missions. When she is working at the Keikoku Hotspring she wears her hair in a bun. When doing non work hour related activities she wears it down.
Other traits : Her ears are pointed due to a ritual her family has when a child is born their ears are pointed symbolizing their bond with feline species.
Clan : Ai Clan ( May have to change last name)
Rank : Chunin
Team : Team 15
Jonin: Daisuke Ai ( Uncle)
Ninja Stats
Ninjutsu: 4/5
Taijutsu: 3/5
Genjutsu: 0/5
Intelligence: 4/5
Strength: 2/5
Speed: 5/5
Stamina: 3/5
Hand-seals: 3/5
Total: 23/40
Achivments :
(Achivment -age)
Started Academy - 5
Graduated/Became a Genin - 12
Became a Chunin : 14
Accused of Killing her father but she was on a mission the night before - 15
Joined Keikoku - 16
Recruited by Akatsuki - 16
Left Akatsuki ( faked death)/Rejoined Keikoku - 18
Has Her daughter Setsuna Uchiha - 18 /19
Opens a Hotspring with Keikoku - 20
Leaves her daughter with Setsuna with her Mother Setsuna Ai who she finds in the Land of Grass . - 21
Battles her cousin Shinju Ai as her father dies and she becomes leader of the Ai clan. -21
Fights in the Ninja war is wounded by a posion kunai she meets a increated Itachi who stays with her until she dies. -22
Pet : Yuki her tiger Megumi recived her when she entered the academy. Her father began teaching Megumi how to train Yuki and those of the feline species
Personality: In the beginning Megumi was Dependent but as she grew she learned to be more independent and learned to do things for herself. After meeting Itachi entering the academy Megumi learned how too trustful she could be. Later when she joins the Keikoku Her personality became more independant ,protective, taunting , and motherly later when she has her daughter Setsuna Uchiha.
Mission (if applied): To avenger herself and her mother from her Uncles lies and take back her clan as rightful Leader of the Ai Clan.
Likes:training, playing with her daughter when not on missions. Training with many felines mostly her Tiger Yuki. Her daughter Setsuna Uchiha
Dislikes : Fighting, Lies, Family who lies , War, death, Ninja Dogs or dogs in general , someone messing with her child.
Habits : Color coding her Kunai handles, and Shuriken centers
Fears : Water, High places and Death.
Weaknesses: Genjutsu , Water Release , High places
Love Interest: Itachi Uchiha
Chakra Element : Fire Release
Family Jutsu or Created by Megumi:
Cat Clone Jutsu : Megumi uses cats to form clones of herself. The clones when destroyed seperate and become cats again . The cats then dissapear.
Cat Fire Claw Jutsu- Making use of her Fire Release element. When Megumi uses this she throws Kunai after doing hand signs at a oponent setting them on fire . She calls it Cat fire Claw because the Kunai acts like a cats claws .
Known Jutsu :
Clone Jutsu
Fire Ball Jutsu
Fire Release: Fire Tiger Explosion
Nekozume - Cat Claw
Shunshin no Jutsu-
Bio:
Megumi was born in Konohagakure or Konoha to Chei and Setsuna Ai , Like all the members of her family after Megumi was born she was taken to the Medical core and had her ears pointed which symbolizes her families special bond with felines like the Inuzukas are with the canine breed who are their biggest rivals in Konoha. Megumi . a few years after Megumi was born the village was attacked by the Kyuubi . Her parents left her hopefully asleep in her bed but the roar of the fox awoke her and frightend her she franitcly searched for her parents and ran from the house and hid . Her parents rushing back noticed Megumi was gone and searched for her. Setsuna went looking for Megumi and found her at the Uchiha home where she was being looked after by Itachi Uchiha whose parents were also out fighting the Kyuubi.
Megumi at the age of 5 was enrolled in the Ninja Academy and was given her pet tiger cub who she called Yuki and began learning to train her.At the Academy since Setsuna was Megumi’s mother Setsuna didn’t want Megumi to be in her class due to other students would get the wrong impression . There Megumi met Itachi again as she was assigned a seat next to him . While in class Megumi admired how smart Itachi was and when she needed help would ask him. It was also at the Academy she learned she was too trusting of others for Itachi would point this out to her .
While studying at home, her uncle Disuke would come around often, and would find Megumi studying outside . There he would talk to Megumi about her father, and would ask her questions about her father as well as start telling her stories that would fill her head. Disuke knew since Megumi was still so young she was very manipulative and would plant stories in her head or secrets he told Megumi not to tell. Setsuna noticed Disuke near Megumi one day and telling her stories. While at the Academy Itachi noticed Megumi would get distracted and even Setsuna asked Itachi to keep a eye on Megumi since they were friends as they would come home from the academy . Disuke hated Itachi for this and knew Itachi couldn’t stay around Megumi forever.
When Itachi graduated to genin at age 8 Megumi was still in the Academy but graduated at the age of 11 She was to turn 12 that same year ,and was paired with Disuke Ai as her Jonin Her team consisted of herself and two boys from her class.One from the Inuzuka and one from another clan in Konoha . As they were rival clans Megumi /Yuki and the Inuzuka boy challenged each other when the Chunin Exams come up however Megumi didn’t become a Chunin until she was close to 13 years old. The same year Chei and Setsuna had Megumi moved to another team fearing Disuke would do something to Megumi.
a year later Megumi was on a mission with her team and Yuki .While away Itachi had been ordered to kill his clan and he did so and fled the village. Megumi upon come back home heard about the massacure she refeused to believe Itachi would do something like that . When Itachi left Disuke began plotting on how to kill his younger brother and become head of the clan. With the help of his eldest daughter Shinju Ai they plotted in the middle of the night.
The next day her Megumi got a message from her father saying he wanted to meet with her at the cafe. While this happend Shinju went to Megumi’s home and took a couple of her ninja tools from her bag. Megumi had made her kunai stick out as she had each one color coded so she could tell from her kunais and shurikens between her teammates weapons. In the village Megumi was waiting for her father and knew she couldn’t delay as she had another mission to get ready for . It was her first higher escort missions and she was excited for it.
When Chei didn’t show up she went on to the meet spot for her team to meet. Later that night after leaving. Her cousin Shinju disquiseing herself as Megumi snuck inside distracting Chei as Disuke came into his brothers study and killed his younger brother leaving Megumi’s stolen kunai and shuriken with her fathers body making it so Megumi killed Chei that morning . Setsuna Ai saw the whole attack and immideately before she was caught by Disuke sent a messenger cat to Megumi warning her not to come home.
She wanted this to be a dream but gave the message to her Jonin in charge and she and Yuki left. She told her Jonin befoe leaving not to say anything for the fear of her mother being killed too. Megumi after leaving her team went rouge for about a year when she turned 16 she joined the Keikoku who was just a starting out as a group. The leader was a girl named Minkao and she was from the Sound village . Soon more members joined becoming a 6 member squad .
The groups lead members however being Megumi Minako and Kiku were being scouted out to be subbordates for the Akatsuki. Minko suggested letting them find them as it would be fun to see how the Akatsuki worked as one of their first missions. Megumi was found by Itachi and Kisame who were on their way back from Konoha Megumis reunion with Itachi wasn’t so nice as she noticed how Itachi had changed.While in the Akatsuki she and Itachi develop a secret relationship after a big long explanation to Itachi what happened in the village.
After a few months in the Akatsuki Megumi , Minako and Kiku all fake their own deaths to go back to their own organization .However Itachi is the only one who knows the truth but won’t say anything to the other Akatsuki members. The Keikoku as away to get money opens a hotspring near a unknown village where no knew them. As to hide their identies from the Akatsuki the girls started wearing white cloakes with a butterly pattern with a attached hood and cloak . They would also wear masks . After
After a year in the Keikoku Megumi finds she is pregnant with her first child Setsuna Uchiha . She names her daughter Setsuna as a respect of her mother, and clan as Megumi was also named after her grandmother Megumi . Megumi like a mother Tiger is very protective over Setsuna . After Itachi dies Megumi leaves Setsuna with her grandmother and heads back to Konoha to clear her name and reveal her uncle and cousins lies to the village. Megumi though finds out her Uncle had died by being posioned. Shinju her cousion took over the role as leader. Megumi comes back after visiting Lady Tsunade and explaines her story to the her and the conciel .
Megumi is held in a cell for for a few months only until her mother comes back telling the council everything she had seen that night of her husbands murder . Megumi is released and is reunited with her mother and daughter. Megumi then goes to her cousin and challenges her for her spot as her fathers heir . Megumi wins the fight only her victory is short lived as the the 4th great war is fast approching.
Before the war starts Megumi runs into Sasuke after he has killed the elders and Danzo .Upon hearing that Megumi had concived the daughter of his dead brother. Sasuke wants to take Setsuna from Megumi . Sasuke tells her if she didn’t give up Setsuna he would fight Megumi for the little girl. ” So be it ” Megumi told Sasuke . They started to fight only for a masked man to tell Sasuke to stop.That they would get the little girl later .
On the battle feild Megumi along with several of her clan members and cat companions . Several of her clan are divided into teams with other clan and ally ninja using their cats a messengers to relay what they find. Megumi is fighting in a battle between a group of ninja brought back by Kabuto .
Megumi is surprised as her dead father is among the ranks of the undead army. While fighting him they are dicussing the events of the night he was murdered . Finally coming to terms with what happend her father crumbles away at peace knowing his daughter will do him proud. Later Megumi is fighting again with a group of undead ninja’s one throws a kunai coated in posion at her. The kunai strucks on of Megumi’s open cuts she had received earilier. the posion leaks through her body only for Itachi who had recently been freed from Kabutos control saves her. However Megumi can’t escape the posion in her system she is paralyzed . Itachi stayed with Megumi as she lay dying and promised to stop the Edo Tensei before she could be incarnate as one of Kabuto’s dead puppets. Megumi smiles one last time and dies.
Family
Clan : Ai Clan
Clan Ablities : Like the Inuzukas the Ai clan trains animals more direct cats or any of the feline Species which includes House cats, Tigers Lions etc. They take in abandoned cubs or ones that have had their mothers killed by hunters. The clan members have a bond with their cat companions at all times most keep them as pets while others train their feline companion for battles against enemy nations or wars.
Tradtions :
When a child is born in the clan their ears are pointed they are taken to the Medical core to do this. This symbolizes the bond the clan has with their feline companions . A child is also given the first name of its grandmother or grandfather though the clan dosen’t look down on this if a member of the clan prefers not to do so.
Rival Clan : Inuzuka Clan
Parents :
Setsuna Ai
Relation to Character: Mother
Ninja Rank/Occupation: Chunin / Teacher at Ninja Academy
Bio: Setsuna ai is Megumi’s mother and a teacher at the Ninja Academy however
she doesn’t teach Megumi’s class for the fear of the other students telling or saying that Megumi would only did better was because Setsuna would be her teacher. When she noticed Megumi was with her Uncle Disuke and Itachi was with her Setsuna asked Itachi to keep a eye out when Disuke had come around . When Chei had become the head of the family Disuke became resentful and Setsuna knew he would try and get to Megumi in order to get to Chei. When Chei is murdered she witnesses who killed him and sends a warning to Megumi via messenger cat to stay away and hide for she was framed by her uncle
Chei Ai
Relation to Character : Father
Ninja Rank/Occupation: Jonin / Head of Ai Clan /Deceased
Bio: Chei Ai is Megumi’s father and head of the Ai clan he is a strict but is only strict because he wants Megumi to do her best or as Megumi called it better than best. He is a Jonin and leader of his own team when he isn’t on mission with his team he is teach Megumi on the basics of training cats and big cats like tigers lions to tiny house cats. Chei gave Megumi her first cat it was a tiger cub Megumi called Yuki. Yuki was a runt from her mothers litter Megumi wanted Yuki and Chei agreed.Chei was a great mentor to Megumi, but when Disuke his older brother started filling Megumi’s head with lies she began to doubt Chei. When Megumi graduated the academy and placed on a team with her Uncle as Jonin her father Chei began to wonder what his brother had been telling Megumi.
Other :
Disuke Ai
Relation to character : Uncle and Jonin
Rank : Jonin /Head of Megumi’s squad/ Muderer
Bio:
Disuke is the eldst brother of Chei and was supposed to have been leader of the Ai clan but because Chei married before Disuke did and had a child he became leader. Disuke became resentful and began plotting against Chei. When he mets Megumi when she is young he sees how trustful she is. Disuke becomes Megumi’s Jonin when she becomes a genin with two other members of their team one being a Inuzuka.
Shinju Ai -
Relation to Character : Cousin
bio:
Was with her father the night of the murder she looks like a identical twin to Megumi so much that Disuke used Shinju to act as Megumi and kill Chei. Thus framing Megumi and causing her to stay away for years. After her father dies Shinju takes over the clan she later fights with Megumi over leadership of the clan.
Setsuna Uchiha
Relation to Character : Daughter
Father: Itachi Uchiha
Bio:
Setsuna is Megumi’s one and only daughter concived by Itachi Uchiha while Megumi was still in the Akatsuki as a subordinate a year later Setsuna is born Megumi sets out to find her mother Setsuna Ai who leaves Konoha looking for Megumi and when ever Megumi has to go on missions she leaves her daughter with her grandmother or if Setsuna isn’t avalibe she leaves Setsuna with one of the other members . Setsuna is a sweet little girl and is the shine of Megumi’s eye. Setsuna looks like Megumi but has her fathers eyes and color of his hair . Although Setsuna is part of Megumi’s clan Her Uchiha traits stick out which after Itachi’s death Sasuke finds out about Setsuna being Itachi’s daughter he tries taking her from Megumi. Megumi dies before Setsuna is enrolled in the Ninja Academy .
Setsuna misses her mother and father dearly but loves being with her grandmother Setsuna. Setsuna is brought to Kakashi in the future to help her learn her Sharningan as she learns it at age 9 .( and thank you very much for your time. Megumi my not be the best but this is why I am asking for help)
Let’s get this review on the road, shall we? ;)
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Appearance/Basic Information:
Alright, her outfit is a little odd looking, but not that bad. I would reccomend removing the black piece underneath the gray kimono to simplify her outfit and lighten it up weight-wise.
Otherwise, her outfit looks pretty good.
I do like how you put into detail how her hair has a blue tint to it when there is direct and bright light against it, and the background about her ears being pointed due to ties with Felines is a very well put idea.
However, I do not see anywhere her height and weight, which I’m sure are even within themselves. (I need to add a link in the reference section of the blog a Height to Weight ratio chart if there isn’t one already.)
Looking over Blood types on a research site, I see that A+ blood is the second most common beside O+. I state this because rather making your character very unique and giving them rare blood types, look at the percentages online and then make your choice- only few people have AB-, A-, B-, and O-. Giving them a more common blood type can help it seem a bit more realistic.
Age-wise, I have to say 13-22 is a very large age difference, depending on her apperance. Usually when making a Naruto Oc, it is reccomending to put two ages- Pre-Shippuden and Shippuden. I would reccomend putting 18-19 years for Pre-shippuden and 21-22 years Shippuden. Just a small reccomendation though, you don’t have to.
Megumi Ai- It means ‘Blessing Love’ or ‘Love Blessing’. I find it a very pretty name, translation and actual name in a whole. It rolls off of the tongue. The more I look at what references you have of her, the more I can see how Megumi fits her well.
Rank-wise I do believe that her statistics should be higher- most leaf ninja’s statistics seem to fall around between 25-28/40, so it’s not too much lower.
I really don’t have much to say when it comes to her birthday, but I do like how you gave her something average rather than a holiday (those are a bit overused). Good job on that! She’s looking pretty good so far! :)
Achievments
Looking through her achievements ages 5 through 15, I do believe these are realistic. However, I’m slightly unsure about the Akatsuki part, which I’ll let B give you a bit of information on it since I don’t really specialize in that area. D|;
I do see that she has her daughter at a young age though and have a few questions:
-Being a young adult/teen mom, does Megumi have some troubles mentally?
-What kind of troubles are there after her daughter is born that she has to face?
-Who helps support her and her daughter; does she raise her by herself?
Ah, I see that the third question is answered a few years on down the line, and that she rests the care of her daughter in her mother’s hands. How does this impact Megumi? Is she slightly saddened having to leave her daughter behind? Does she feel detached?
Getting to the Itachi part, I must say that it may be better to not have them meet once again, since not only does he die, but he returns through Edo Tensei, and ends up going elsewhere. Though, I would say that if she dies within that day they meet up, I do believe that meeting up with his Edo Tensei form could be believable.
Personality:
I love how you had explained how she changed throughout her story and moreso in a short sentence! There are definitely a few negative and positive traits that balance each other out nicely.
When it comes for her mission, I advise her not being completely set on this mission, for this could blind her very much from other goals (as shown in Sasuke, who had become twined in revenge).
When she color codes her Kunai and Shuriken, what for? I’m slightly curious to know!
I see her weaknesses and fears, but I see no strengths- I’d like to see those in the future!
Having a canon relationship causes me to jump on the ‘Iffy’ boat once again, but so far, I’ve seen that you’ve done a nice job on keeping her and Itachi’s relationship realistic seeming.
I have no other suggestions, likes, or dislikes for this section…Moving on to the final section, Biography.
Biography
Alright, I’ve read through her biography, and again, I don’t have too much to say on this- just a few suggestions here and there.
During the Kyuubi attack, why would she have run off into the Uchiha compound? I don’t believe they let just anybody into there, as it seems moreso a private home than anything, and that they’d want to keep to themselves, giant fox attacking or not.
When it comes to her fighting Sasuke, I do not believe he would fight her- just moreso sneer and go on. He has things to do, people to kill, revenge to seek. He would not stop in time to have a small battle. Perhaps she runs into somebody else?
To wrap this review up, I must say that I like how you wrote her biography start to end! It shows that a lot goes on through her life!
I understand you feel that she is not the best, and she is not. However, she is not the worst either, so don’t worry. <3
If I were to give her a number rating from 1 (worst) to 10 (Best) I would rate her a 7/10. With a few more improvements, you could easily move that rating to an 8 or 9! ;)
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Thank you very much for doing this ^,^ I have been working on her before you did this >.< Oh and The black under her clothes was supposed to be some type of underpants but I can remove them. I may have more characters for you review later.
